I love the format and this piece flows really well. I am really impressed. I love the line about pressed flowers in spiral bound notebooks. Also love that you've got a soundtrack! Lovely imagery and perfectly worded x

I could feel something melancholy, the imagery is wonderful.

Love the format on the word "fall" and the lines "my love for you is like the russet-brown leaves that
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from the umbrella trees,
they lay
dead and forgotten
against the pavement"

Very beautiful. ;D

-dances.with.sunflowers.

Wow. First spontaneous thought is: liked it. I was drawn in at the start, you see, with you giving precise it's own line. Very attention grabbing.

You keep this interesting, too. You mix the poem up with metaphors and good descriptions. A good line I particularly liked was:
"and fling them away
like dust in the air!"

I did not care much for your
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It seemed rather strange and didnt prove a point. Was it for emphasis? If so, you already had that in the start. I cant really think of other reasons, thus I conclude that I felt the move was without reason. I'll happily listen to an explanation though.

All in all: Lovely poem! I was awed.

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Beautifully written