Hey Kid,


A word of advice:


If you're going to attempt to "flame" someone like you did earlier...at least have the balls to stand behind it. I mean, I understand it was your first time doing so... given the poor quality it was in. But seriously, spewing random gay crap in a review and then quickly blocking that person is about as effective as shouting an insult at someone in a crowded hallway and then ducking. I mean, I understand that you're sexually frustrated... given the nature of your "writing" but there really is no need to advertise it whenever you find an "opportunity". What I'm saying is, maybe you should spend less time masturbating to two guys anal raping each other and more time, I don't know, putting your angry thoughts together. You see, when I read what you wrote, I don't see someone who has their shit together or who knows exactly what it is they're getting into... what I see is a little girl who is too caught up in what her little friends think of her... I mean, you may have been thinking "Oh golly gee whiz, look what I have produced right here, my comrades are sure going to get a kick out of this one!". Or maybe your mind is somewhere else, maybe it too is in the realm of contemplating a sex change and the joys you could have with a penis and a set of balls. In any case, you have a lot of potential but it seems like you won't be able to get out of the "invisible audience" phase any time soon. With that being said, I hope you enjoy waiting in line for the penis-that-could-be.


With Love,


Royal Bliss.

me luved it!tis juicey! it was a lil confusing in the beginning and i was like..wah?? but then yeah i got it. heh i'm smart! poor marty tho.

I feel awfully proud of myself right now, cuz I totally got the backwards thing XD (Okay, so it took awhile, but I got it!) I love this to pieces. The tone of the story...and I love the characters. Even Robin, in his complete bitchiness. But seriously, this was so wonderfully bittersweet...and it still ended happily! Again caught me by surprise! You're sneaky O_O Alright, done spazzing XD But really. Your stories are love.

Heh I understood this at the end of them buying the new apartment paragraph thingy part in time, whatever

I liked this story, though.. it was clever how you did that. made me think. and I liked how you ended it, so shut up.

Oh my God, I was going through my docs and I realised I never sent the review I typed just after readind this story! (I type them on Microsoft Word because FP has the bad habit of making reviews disappear -.-) so here it is. It goes like this:

Ha ha, you’re so smart and witty. Seriously. I love you. I want your brain :D
I understood what you were on about at around…the third paragraph. Suspected it on the second because I read your forum entry. So I thought: OH MY GOD! THAT SCHEMING LITTLE MINX! SHE’S GOING TO START WITH THE END AND END WITH THE START TO TRICK HER WAY INTO FOLLOWING THE ROLE OF HATE-THEN-LOVE AND STILL HAVE A DEPRESSING NDING!! *cue: narrowed eyes and little red throbbing manga-veins on temples*

But then you had mercy on me :)

Big taime, laike, respect to yo, homie, tho, yeah? Because it was a good plan. Seriously. Fair play to you :D

Great entry. I feel so sorry for our darling ickle Mars though :( I really don’t like Robin. I think he needs to be tied to Mars’ bed and then…shown who wears the trousers. By Mars. Who, I’m sure, would know how to manage the situation SKILLFULLY ;)

Oh, and can I say? Mars’ character is really well written, and developed enough that you could TOTALLY write a full-fledged story for him :D *hinthint*

Thank you so much for your entry darling! Oh, and THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR MY ICONE/AVVIE! I LOVE IT!! I LOVE THE PIC YOU’VE CHOSEN, IT HAS THIS VOYEURISTIC FEEL TO IT, IT FITS SO PERFECTLY!! *glomps* *hugs* *cuddles* THANK YOU! I LOVE YOU! *hugs* *molests*

:3

very good, very very good, I actually like the ending, I thought it tied it all together quite nicely! and it makes more sense than u give urself credit for, it wasn't to hard to figure out that it was moving slowly backwards (the first couple of times were, but once it hit the bar scene it made sense) kewl! great job! Cant wait to read even more of ur stuff!! XD

:o It wasn't confusing, I really liked it :):) Though the ending made me feel bad for Mars... A lot of people are doing this challenge thing, I might try the next one >o

Oh wow, everything is out of order. I think I get it though. When I read back through it in the actual order, I liked it. I pretty much got the order before that, but it just worked out, if that makes any sense. I liked it.

I liked that. A lot. The way you wrote it was interesting,I think, with the whole last middle first lasst thing. So yeah, good job!
~ThisIs

Gah, I LOVE stories with a wacky timeline! I read this one story on here that was just completely random, one chapter would be two guys' life after they'd been together ten years, another when they first started dating...it was amazing how it all fit together. Chains Corroded, I think it's called.

This was lovely.

I loved it. surprisingly for me, i was able to keep my head the entire time, and knew what was going on, it was that amazing...
I love it! I love you!
agh my tummy feels like happiness and all fluttery and joy.
mm. great story~!

Well I like it!
You made it very good. Lots of love (kind of).

Small children!

not confused, i absolutely love the way it was written, really makes a difference to the story XD

Cute one shot, nice open ending!

WHOOP!

YAY!

... Etc.

How you can find so many words for the one meaning is amaxing. Your either really smart, or really smart and have a free book beside you.

Anyway, brilliant story.
:D:D:D