The summary drew me in, so I must give you a point on that. Although I expected more from chapters, it was okay. The pace of the story is a bit slow, but that might be on account of the length of the chapters. I hope that you are able to update quickly because of that reason. There are some errors here and there, but it doesn't distract too much from the writing. However, I advise you to proofread more carefully. The general storyline sounds interesting, I hope that your writing will be too. I look forward to the next chapter.

There were parts of this that I liked and there were parts of this that I disliked.

Firstly, the pace was not very enjoyable. Actually, I can't honestly say there was any pace exhibited in this prologue. It doesn't even seem to resemble a prologue, which is usually used to set up a plot with background information one would not normally see in the actual story. This seems like chapter 1 to me.

The dialog was flat, which was disappointing since that was most of the chapter. There is hardly any time in which description was added into the way a character spoke her words, and some just seemed out of place. When a person is frightened, they hardly ever respond by yelling their entire name un less she addresses this person that way normally. However, the following sentence confirmed that she is generally addressed as Miss Ashford.

There was one this here that I did enjoy. The plot, even though it has hardly been expanded on, does not seem to be all that bad. You have a here an interesting enough story to keep me interested (which is a marvel in itself since I am hard to keep interested.) Since I don't totally enjoy your writing style, it's amazing that such a story chapter has me interested in such a hardly-defined plot. Bravo on that.

Even though the dialog was flat, the cast of characters seem diverse enough, and it may be the driving force right now. A lot of times I read stories with five or six characters that are hard to tell apart from each other and pretty much play the same role. Here, we have three distinct characters that are molded in an interesting and unique way.

The biggest thing I can suggest is to make the chapters longer. Include more description of scenery and character appearance and action. It can only make it better. I hope my review helps for the future.

Sounds interesting so far! But some more description would be nice, for example ages, setting and physical description. Then again, I'm just a picky reader, hehe. You're doing fine. I want to see where this is going :D