"low enough, never even close, not very much."... the not very much didn't make sense to me there. It sounded awkward and I wasn't sure what you were trying to say

I think some of your sentences are run ons, I might work on that a little bit. I liked the formatting, the number thing was interesting and I think your use of parenthesis, etc. fit well. I also like the n-n-not, that was a nice touch. Very powerful images in this piece. Nice job.

love it, as always. great job. very powerful.
Faith

hope you write more.. this is brilliant ♥ thanks for the review on falling leaves, by the way ;)

this is the type of writing i've been waiting for, for awhile.
Great job!

"(&love:) it shouldn't be such a star-shot miracle."
AWESOME!

I really love all of it. It's so visual and yet profound.

Amazing poem, love it.

I have no words, instead this poem chokes me with pure emotion.

I like the verse 2, the whole poem has a very deep message and the imagery is kinda dark but powerful.

"I don't speak of redemption." Beautiful. Mystical.

"Pull the trigger in the bathroom stall." Good imagery!

Good descriptive wording and emotion throughout :)