 -harajuku love- 2008-10-28 . chapter 1Dude, this is like exactly how i feel about my ex best friend.
Really, really pretty (: |
 -Heidi Andrews- 2008-10-19 . chapter 1Gah...
just wrote a huge long review, and accidentaly deleted it.
wah
i love your new poem, especially the "we were pawns at your touch paragraph"
i am currently writing this from Sydney airport, at one of those free internet stations. Feel loved :D
our plane has been delayed, was meant to take off 10 mins ago, and we still have a while until boarding, so i am filling up time reading your stories. yay
my email wont work properly on this computer other wise i would be emailing you. instead you get to read a massive 'review"
ok, well i ought to go - i dont know how much more i can fit into this review slot. probabli alot, but matthew is making me gho play cards with him, so i wont have the chance to findout. sob
ok,
bye
Heidi (sarahh. duh)
x |
 DeeFective 2008-10-19 . chapter 1Oh, I really like this line:
"Cause this is the lie you’re singing
The mixed up, jumbled up
Web you’re weaving
I didn’t want to let you know
But- we’re leaving."
It's very song-y and it has a nice ring to it when spoken out loud, which means it was well-written. The song as a whole was good. I like the rhyming also because it didn't sound forced at all. In most songs I find that it does but not in this one. Nicely done.
-Dee, from the Review Marathon.
[Check up on it. Link's in my profile.] |
 AsTheRainFalls 2008-10-18 . chapter 1This is really deep. I can completely relate, I just got out of a destructive friendship that reminds me so much of this song. "We followed like good friends do/ The chaos and the empty too/ We tried our best through and though/ Until we realized/The centre of the chaos was nothing new/ The centre of the chaos was/ You." Sorry to be redundant and quote half of your song, but that part touched me the most. It's so real. |
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