I like this piece I feel I can relate to parts of it.
A lot said in these two lines. Well done!

I love the repetition of the motifs in the hotel room, and how you used almost the same words from the prologue in the epilogue. The prologue was one of my favourite parts, because it was just so cute, and I also liked how you kept referring to the stars as below.

That last sentence is so original and such an interesting idea. I just read all this right now but it's that line stands out for me the most. I really love how simple, short phrases strung together can sound deep and amazing and insightful. Take care.

time mach3

i love the first line.

sorry, that was a completely hopeless review.

Is all of this true or was it conjured from the inner folds of your imagination?

Time MAchine 2
-oh, thats sad. That happens a lot to me. I have this crazy lovely happy experiance with somebody and after awhile, it isn't there anymore. or they've just gone away.
:( :)
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yeah yeah, i'm pretty much jobless.
plus, i like these tiny fractures

On time machine:

i like the idea of being so volatile. 'Volatile' is my favorite word at the moment ;)
i like the crazy impulsiveness. love the first line.

the piece shell makes me think of this one friend I have. Lately, we've been fighting a lot. There is this distance that has been formed and its very painful. The second line sort of radiates the same thought process I have-that maybe one day everything will be okay again.

Awe this is really sad but really well written. I am most def favoriting you and this. c: