Good job. I'm not quite sure why the rape and abortion were thrown in there, seeing as how because she'd already had a healthy baby it probably wasn't complications from the abortion that killed Lacey. That was a bit random. But, other than that, it was great. I loved the ending, great job tying that in.
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I just realized that they put a limit on your review now! Only 8,0 characters!! How do they expect me to do THAT?!?!?!

Anyway ... should be doing school work; i'm procrastinating.

To start out: second paragraph -- should be past tense. It's talking about what he did earlier in the day and is using present continuous tense, which doesn't make sense. The problem kind of continuous as you talk about yesterday ... you go into "now" after the memory of last night is over. But now is him sitting on the sofa watching Ian and Maggie, not in the nursey. Making sense? Basically there's some timing issues.

About Maggie's abortion ... I'm having a hard time figuring out the time frame of this. Not that it's still not a risky procedure, but not so much so with the advances in technology, etc. Also, if she had Alex then I don't think her abortion affected her ability to have children anymore or whatever. Not sure ... but yeah ... generally complications will follow through the whole time.

Padma is who? Guessing some sort of stuffed animal?

You said maggie was cleaning up Ian's accident. Guessing you meant Alex's.

I general I get pretty jumbled between the flashbacks to the past and the present. I'm not so sure when the memory goes back into the present all the time. It takes me a while. Transitions don't feel strong enough. Or clear enough.

Hi!
I think it was the format that caused me to be confused at times. I know you used the dividers to separate scenes between the present and past, but usually the past or flasbacks are italicized. When I see that I know to prepare myself that this is a flashback or some sort that would explain what is happening in the present. Also, it took me a few seconds to understand why Maggie slapped her husband. I don't know, maybe I'm just slow.

However, I did think you captured their anguish well, I felt so sorry for Alex, and just so sad for the family in general. You have been posting stories about very dificult situations lately. It's so descriptive, so very emotional, but really, really good.

that was so sad...i cried. :( you really are a great writer...the mother's and father's pain and what they were going through really showed. keep up the good work (and maybe update the jade bracelet soon? :D).

i thought this piece was extremely well written. though i think there are a couple typos in the beginning of the story that you may want to fix. i thought you did a great job showing how your characters reacted to such a difficult situation.

i generally like the idea of this story - but i dont think it flows very well. i find myself confused at different parts.

You have become such an amazing writer. This story made me cry and it was gripping to the very end. Great catharsis.

I´m not usually a one shot person.. but I really enjoyed that. I felt that it was well done and had enough content that I wasn´t left hanging. Very nice. I´m looking forward to your regular update as well... : )

as expected, you made me cry...

there are itsy bittsy tiny topographical errors but they didn't mar you're work. keep up the good work...

beautiful...