 Airhead 2009-07-05 . chapter 1 Aww, just AW. |
 SugarCraziiness 2009-07-03 . chapter 1O.o I have never made a one-shot and you seem like you're a pro at it. I wish I could, but I can never get an idea good enough to pack it onto one chapter. Mine always have to be dragged on. T.T
--Leanne |
 paraNormal 2009-06-29 . chapter 1very cute :) |
 Hazelnut Romance 2009-05-16 . chapter 1random but cute all the same! good job. |
 Super.Secret.Music.Mission. 2008-12-23 . chapter 1This was so sweet..:) J'adore. |
 Lian Bynum 2008-11-29 . chapter 1This is so cute! I love the huge variety of all the things he does to her, but in the end, it doesn't matter because she loves him and he loves her, so it's all OK.
Aw! ^ ^ |
 Sakurelle 2008-10-25 . chapter 1Awesome! ^^ It was very sweet. |
 Hopelessly Cliche 2008-10-24 . chapter 1Hey!
Finally missy! I've been waiting for a oneshot from you for ages! Literally! lol
Aw, but this was so cute! I love how you wrote it all starting with 'he makes me'! -squeals!-
Anywho, loved this! Write moree! :D
HC
xx |
 passionate4pens 2008-10-24 . chapter 1aw thats so cute, i loved it. |
 pinkguppie 2008-10-23 . chapter 1Wow! It was so cute! And sweet!
Very well written :D
Gup |
 NattyAwesome 2008-10-23 . chapter 1Wow.
I really liked that.
A LOT.
Great job! |
 sticks stones and TECHNO 2008-10-23 . chapter 1Wow, my life is kind of like that too... except we lost our love along the way.
I really like this, and how repetitive the 'he makes' are. It flows nicely.
Just to critique, I think the line "when he sees something innuendo-y on anything he sees." would sound better if you used a different word for 'sees' the first time, so you aren't using the same word too much. :) But that's just constructive critisism, I think it's fine the way it is.
Anyway, bottom line: I like this. :D |