 totallyadopt23 2008-12-28 . chapter 2For some odd reason, I forgot to review this. Anyway, it was a great chapter. And stupid government, they just had to mess everything up, didn't they? Of course they did... Well, I hope you'll update soon! |
 mr. stranger 2008-12-24 . chapter 2moi buen (I cant spell in spanish sadly) that was utter perfection, needs some character detail but none the less perfect. by chance do you plan on adding a bounty hunter.
if you are I would gladly assist I have a plithura of character that would suit your story perfectly.
and good choice on corperate rule instead of an actual government leaves room for criminals of a goodly nature to intercede and assist miss Rika. |
 QuothTheWren 2008-11-27 . chapter 2Wow, this chapter was really good (and intense!) Will we get to find out why everyone loved her father so much? (and I apologise if you've already explained that and I've just forgotten, my memory's not the best at present) |
 Narq 2008-11-26 . chapter 2I really like this chapter~~ i'd say it's one of your best!
Narq |
 Black Lotus Flower 2008-11-26 . chapter 2Nice chapter! I didn't see anything wrong with it. Poor Riku...but I guess most flashbacks have to be sad or they would be less entertaining. The main character has to have something that motivates them. Update soon! |
 Allen Aeson 2008-11-26 . chapter 1Wow, I really like your style of writing. The story though reminds me so much about this character from One Piece named Robin and her past. Anyways, it's the World Government, and she is being hunted down because of the bounty on her head. Origin story is similar but I see a different path, that's what makes a story exciting. Let's see how this story goes! |
 Julia Lucrezia Hanazono 2008-11-26 . chapter 2Aw, poor Rika! Nice chapter! This is great! |
 Narq 2008-11-25 . chapter 1Nice story, I really hope you can update~
Narq. |
 QuothTheWren 2008-11-25 . chapter 1Good introduction- can't wait for the next chapter! (and nice title, by the way) |
 Julia Lucrezia Hanazono 2008-11-23 . chapter 1Aw, that poor girl! This kinda reminds me of Gakuen Alice (a manga) a bit. But this seems like a great story! Um...if you don't mind, would you like to see/review my stories? Sorry to ask. I'm mostly working on TCR (The Catalyst's Rebellion) and I'm proceeding with chapter 39. This seems like a great story! Keep up the good work! |
 totallyadopt23 2008-11-12 . chapter 1Wow, this is great! Poor Rika though...at least it makes for an interesting story. Well, I'll be looking forward to an update. :D |
 Black Lotus Flower 2008-10-24 . chapter 1Man, if I had to live like that I think I'd kill myself. But then there'd be no story. :) Decent first chapter and I look forward to more. I'm guessing that the nezt chapter is the backstory. I wonder what happened to her...guess I'll have to wait to find out. |