Story looks interesting so far. The way the reason for their running isn't explained helps draw you in. And it makes me want to find out what exactly they're running from.
The ending was sad, but this is a prologue so we'll see what happens next.
Since you asked for mistakes and such I've sent you a PM with stuff that might help out a bit (rather than put them in a review!).
Keep it up.

Oh, how sad! This has potential. The only problem for me was the formating. If you need a beta I'll (*cough*)volunteer my services. ;D

If not, I've still got my eye on this.

Ciao!

~nicola~