wow.. interesting again.. that's all i really have to say. yes. i apologize, i'm just not in a very review-y mood...

"i stated/matter of fact" that confused me. Were you saying I don't have a home as a matter of fact or did you mean that you said it matter-of-factly?

"biting my finger/nails" fingernails is one word, so you should put a dash after finger. In that same line I didn't like how you repeated the word biting.

You need commas with your quotes, unless that was intentional. The phrasing in the last line also seemed a bit awkward to me.

I really love this piece, your descriptions and imagery were unique and very powerful. It definitely made you want to keep reading and your word choices were great as well. I also liked how you put in bits of conversation, it was interesting.

this is beautiful
the parasitic idea for what, i'm guessing, is an unwanted pregnancy was perfect. at first, it seems like disregard, but the rest of the poem shows it's actually disbelief, shock, being handled with anger. i hope that makes sense

konnichi wa

Can you explain? I get the gist of it, but I'd like the word-by-word translation. I am sure if I sat here long enough, I would come up with something... but right now I'm working on an essay and trying to force myself not to procrastinate and my brain has turned to mush, and I really like this poem. :P Please?

Ha det
-Shan-