i think its just fine and that you dont have to meet someones standered! (and i know i cant spell but im not taking the time to word check it)

interesting...very interesting.. I like this book two it seems like it has a lot of potential. I can also see that your writing is slowly getting better. With all the writing you do I'm sure you write very professionally in no time. Anyways back onto the story. I loved the part with Lilith. But honestly sometimes I get confused with your over-abundance of characters. They seem to pop up out of nowhere and I think that you need to integrate them into the story better. There are too many characters for me to remember I only remember Lilith, Lilith( Cains Mom), Cain, Lucifer, Jun, Constantinus Galerius, Paris and Abel. So when you randomly flip back to a character I get really confused. that could be because I haven't read LPL in a long time or simply because you have too many cahracters. Other than that


Also I feel like you don't put describe Cain enough? Are we ever going to have another POV of Cain? That would be cool because we could see how much his feelings have changed toward Lilith since he met her. You also have a few awkward sentences here and ther but it's nothing major. Hm...lets see... other than that I have no objections to your story. Keep up the good work I strongly feel that this story and you have great potential.

-sara