Wow a very descriptive story. I like the imagry you can see in you head. Even though there are adult themes you can't always see them unless you know what it's talking about.

I really like this - you've managed to pack a lot into a short space. The first couple of paragraphs really gripped me, especially the beginning of the second, as I was wondering why the woman was like that.
I also like the way you've introduced something that most people would find a small annoyance - the way she can't pronounce 'bugger' properlu - into something that it obviously on this woman's mind a lot.
I have to say, I wasn't too sure on what this sentence meant:
"For now, it is daylight savings and she is all bare legs and green cotton underwear, no goosebumps and a smoothly subtle warmth that spreads from the night to her limbs." - is it winter and she's saving on heating? It was the daylight savings bit I didn't really get.
I love the last line, and the way you've put it on it's own makes it really powerful. I like using that technique in my poetry =]
So, overall, great piece of writing! Well done =]
-Amy

it seems like so much of this, the cigarette descriptions, the accents, is inspired from real life. the daylight savings sentence and the indian style part. they are such very personal experiences and memories, even though it's told in third person. i like that.