My gosh that was bloody creepy. Wow, that made me squirm a bit. Very good story, something about it kept me reading it til the end.

I can definately see why this is the favorite of your two stories. I especially liked how you set up the exposition with the story about his mother, and the ending was just creepy! However, I'm still finding the same problem with how your portreying your character. Bryan lacks depth and personality. Try looking into the mind of your character more as your writing the story, you'd be surprised how much it can improve your writing. There were also still a few grammatical and spelling errors. Very nice cliffhanger at the end by the way, but I wonder... is that the end of the first murderous knife or does it come back?

I did notice a few errors (such as the unneeded capitalization of "child" in the first sentence and saying "garbage BACK" instead of "garbage bag"). I also suggest go into more depth with Bryan's thoughts. When he started laughing like a maniac, I didn't really have a grasp on what was going on inside his head. If I had a knife following me around and trying to kill me, I'd be scared shitless! It would be NO laughing matter.

I have to admit, though, that the story itself was very fun to read and follows something that I'd never heard before (ex., his mom throwing out the knife because "it gets a taste for blood"). It reminds me of the kind of horror tales you tell around a campfire when it's otherwise pitch-black outside. Very creepy. Not something I would want to have happen to me.

Well done!

Hi Leon,

well done! I really like your story which has a somewhat crazy plot but thrilled you anyway! Thanks a lot! Bye Alex

Well...sounds like he's screwed O.O...*** pants*...O.O...Thats the sign of a good horror story e.e *gives two thumbs up*

I have a few things to say aboot this. The first of which being, ** righteous!
Man, this story is amazing. Has the feel of an urban legend in the way it's told from a kind of old school narrative. The end was particularly beautiful. Heh, I wonder what they'll do with all his stuff? Sell them at the flea market? I gotta say, that'll be quite the abbatoir of aflea market after.
This is pretty much perfect on it's own, but one thing you could do to make it a teensy bit better, let him remember his Mother's warning, but since they'rre such expensive knives, he doesn't throw them away. I dunno, gives it more of an, 'Oh snap, you should have listened' factor. Make it more King too.
But holy ** man, frocking awesome.

-Al

Ah, wow, the last paragraph there really got to me. Very descriptive. It was very good, also- I'm just easily affected by those sorts of stories, haha. I liked it a lot, though.