First of all, just a few typos ...
1. "It was enough to peek my interest" - Should be "pique". They sound the same, but the two are really very different words.
2. "... raveling in the nervous glance he sent out the window" - Did you mean "reveling"?
The story was great, though, if a little disturbing (that's usually a good thing, actually, in my opinion); you are a fantastic writer.

Ha ha, I loved this! Great use of figurative language. Awesome.

very nice imagery. Completed with a grace and built up with slow desire. Very beautiful wording. A haunting game of cat and mouse, lust and wanting. Brilliant.

One of my absolute favorite songs, and you did it justice with this excellent story.

That was a good one, really. I didn't exactly know it was about a vampire until halfway through. I thought it was about dark faeries or something. It was great.