Yes! I love this piece! However, if there were one thing to fix it would be a rather complex and advanced element of poetry, but very essential to a good poem nonetheless: syllables. There should be a syllabic pattern throughout the poem, or a rhyming poem at least. Otherwise the rhymes are cast useless as the flow is butchered. Otherwise, fantastic job!

Happy writing,

-DV-

Creepy. It was good though, I could see poe's element of rhyme scheme in there. Nice work.

Velvet.