This is very beautiful.

You're so descriptive, and the imagery is fantastic - I feel like I'm THERE, and the way you describe how he's feeling - I can feel it all.

This is great! You should be proud to be one of few authors who has the ability to make the reader feel like the entire piece is unfolding before their eyes.

I was sucked in.
Great job!
Katie

I love this. It's quite extraordinary. I like the layout, it's original and makes it easier to read and I love the story itself. Very angsty and emotional. Good job.

God Bless You
~Holli xx