I think it's really sad that you never finished this... Or at least gave us more. Because my interest is piqued by that scary prince. You led me on this path, and I expected the prince to be discomforted by this. Only he wasn't.

The imagery in this was great. I do think some of the sentences are strung together a little awkwardly (around the section with the flames), but that's only if you read it closely. If you let yourself be... I guess, taken away by the scene, it probably won't be noticed.

Amazing last sentence. Sentence before that, maybe take away the first comma, but that's about it.

Wow, this was very well written, as though the words wrapped around you. Very well done.

For the Review Marathon! Congrats on being a winner and I'm sorry it's taken me this long to review you, but I did have some great excuses. Won't bore you with them now, though.

Well now, I'm going to be critical so when you go back and revise your NaNo novel in December you'll have some stuff to work with. First off, though, I'm going to tell you that I loved how you played on the senses in this piece. You started us off with sound, then moved on to smell and sight. It was wonderful, because it transported the reader to your setting at once -- and you accomplished all of this in your first paragraph. What can I say but that you have a great hook.

"The eyes of some were filled with amusement, others with grief, and yet others with absolute nothingness." This felt a little bit lengthy and some of it was unnecessary and awkward, in my opinion. I think it could be changed to something along the lines of 'Some watched on with amusement, others with grief and yet others with absolute nothingness." I also don't like the use of 'absolute nothingness' and think you could change that to 'some were impassive', but you know, that's a personal thing.

"Adorned by extravagant red robes". Again, this felt a little lengthy for me and the use of 'by' made everything feel a little passive. I think you could use something like 'Robed in red' instead, but that doesn't really suit the style of your writing. Hmm, I don't know what to do about that.

Okay, and now for some more positive feedback. Imagery: Brilliant. Last line: WOW. I want to know more.

I'm putting this on my alerts because I thought it was a truly good read. I know you're writing it for NaNo and that explains the lengthiness of some sentences -- I always write overly long sentences when I'm doing NaNo, so you're excused for that. Can't wait to see what happens next, and make sure you don't edit/look at any of this concrit till December, when you're done NaNo, otherwise you might get sidetracked! We wouldn't want that, now would we?

Best of luck from a fellow NaNo-er and congrats on winning the RM again!
-Ink-

Yo, dreamer.
Alistair seems to have been a bit twisted by his father's executions. The amusement his father shows at the deaths of the people... it seems his father has led him into believing something along the lines of the king being the messenger of the gods, as was often thought in the middle ages. I find it a great start for a story, and would like to wish you luck with your NaNoWriMo project.
-Kya.

Well first I want to say thanks for reviewing, and second this is really good and I can't wait to see where it goes.

I liked the writing, already with only five small paragraphs I get the whole feeling of being there.
The second thing I liked was the imagery, and how I feel I already I know so much about the prince. Like his father, I guess he is a very unkind man, and greedy. Great setting, no grammar or spelling mistakes as far as I could see. Looking forward to more. :)