The beginning could use more details and description. You just put her running home, but you didn't really describe her setting. This first chapter was good, though.

Is there more? If there is, i'd love to read the rest :)

Hey,

great story

I like mysterious men with pretty eyes...

i bet he's a prince or some rich noble

You know, I'm writing a story about Egypt as well and i was just about to call one of my characters Amisi but now i'll have to find another one..

damn you... :P

just out of interest what time period is this set in

i know it's in ancient egypt but like what year/kingdom

update soon!

Good story, can't wait to read more!

Wonderful story! the ending was so unexpected. Great job!

this is amazing,

you've gotta add more as soon as possible!

i hope you have more stories up, cause i'm about to go read them :D

I really like it! Now you just need to update, like ASAP!

Joker

I really like the plot! Well-written!

Egypt! Oh that alone would've made me stick around. I'm curious, so, I will be waiting!