|Reviews for Breathe|
| Zoe Marhassa 5/22/09 . chapter 1
The beginning could use more details and description. You just put her running home, but you didn't really describe her setting. This first chapter was good, though.
| three.little.words 4/4/09 . chapter 1
Is there more? If there is, i'd love to read the rest :)
| SecretSymphony 1/22/09 . chapter 1
I like mysterious men with pretty eyes...
i bet he's a prince or some rich noble
You know, I'm writing a story about Egypt as well and i was just about to call one of my characters Amisi but now i'll have to find another one..
damn you... :P
just out of interest what time period is this set in
i know it's in ancient egypt but like what year/kingdom
| BS2007 12/11/08 . chapter 1
Good story, can't wait to read more!
| Godsmusician93 11/3/08 . chapter 1
Wonderful story! the ending was so unexpected. Great job!
| katelynn63 11/3/08 . chapter 1
this is amazing,
you've gotta add more as soon as possible!
i hope you have more stories up, cause i'm about to go read them :D
| Smartass Joker 11/3/08 . chapter 1
I really like it! Now you just need to update, like ASAP!
| Lollisalol 11/3/08 . chapter 1
I really like the plot! Well-written!
| Nyleve Nalloc 11/3/08 . chapter 1
Egypt! Oh that alone would've made me stick around. I'm curious, so, I will be waiting!