writing failure? no. i love it, and wish that you would post more of it. :)

WOW! That was a great start. You really set yourself up just in the prologue. I love the mix up of sunset and sunrise. That is a way of making your point without a long description (the guilty is speaking). You just have me craving to know more. Who is Erica? Who is Ebony? Why does she have a strange name? I love these kind of questions being set up that fast.

Good grammar (of course I got to wrapped up in it to really pay attention, ah, I'm rambling)

Pavati Angeni

Oh, now I'm curious. Why are they constantly under the microscope? I'm not normally one to read stories on the computer, but this one has definitely captured my interest.

For some reason, it reminds me of Maximum Ride.
Anyway, it looks pretty good so far! I can't wait to see the rest...

Hey that was a pretty good prologue. I'm really interested to see the rest, it's such a good idea!

By the way, thanks for the review. How did you find me?

My friend Megan (Ellaoptimistic here on faictionpress) wrote a NanoWrimo too.
I can't wait for you to release the rest =]

First of all, I love the title. It sounds so awesome, I had to read the story.
Second, the story itself is quite intriging. May I suggest switiching frome first person to third once in a while? It might give it an interesting flow. Otherwise, keep up what you have, because it is great so far.
-YoshiLink

P.S. May I ask how you found me? I would love to hear the answer!

Oh interesting. I hope you're going to post more soon, seeing as according to NaNo you have 20k words so far. (Beating me, I've been rather distracted this year ;p)

But yeah, I do wish for more. The idea is there. The character is there. Now show me some action. :)

~Reda~

Nice prologue, good luck with getting 50,00 words!

oh kate... another story? LOL and monika's right you are OBSESSED!! ;D
haha wel hopefully you'll finish this by the end of this month LOL I'll make you write during lunch
teehee!
-update son!-

A good start :) can't wait to read more.

1 question- in the first paragraph, I don't think "Yet" is necessary.

Good start. Your story caught my attention, though it's probably because of that interesting bit: NaNoWriMo... yeah seriously. (laugh)

Anyway, like one other that said, it seemed like your synopsis was a little off with the prologue, and I'd assume that she was brainwashed or something? Or the traumatic incident which cause her to become experiment caused a memory relapse resulting in amnesia? The synopsis was fitting more for a 3rd person view rather than from a first person view, but we shall see how this goes.

I hope you will dwell more into details of the time and place, because everything is so vague for the moment. It also seemed to have placed the main character in an omnipotent position since she knew so much yet so little was given to her. The past and future are rather vague, but again, that's up to you. Hope to see more of this from you soon :)

~Kagami

Fascinating. I look forward to more chapters.

~Dragon

Really good summary. Made me want to read your story. Though, I'm a little confused. The summary makes it sound like she became an 'experiment' during her life, while this beginning makes it sound like she's always been an experiment. Unless she doesn't remember her former life?

omg! you posted it!! I love you katizle! it's an amazing story and you better get posting. I know you have more than 7 other chapters written. hop to it!! (I'm on my way to read the next chapter now... =P
ps. no you didn't monika. I'm actually reading chapter 4 now, which is actually chapter 5 if you count the prologue. so ha! and, I was the one who MADE katizle show it to you and post it on fp. so no, monika. I'm pretty sure I beat you, by like 4 days.