I absolutely love this story!

this is really sick... he should be in jail, and she should not just let this go. rape is as bad as if not worse than murder. How could you write a story in which its ok that he raped someone? do you realize how truly horrible rape is?

since you seem to be constantly tlking bout this ones 'hype' i decided to read... and get some tips on writing from a male's point of veiw. i like the poem-y thing at the begining. actual content short but kinda gets you to want to find out more
"tea-pots are landing on my head"
i have one long break so i'm reading your stuff.

I don't want to be mean just honest and say this story was very confusing at parts

Other then that I enjoyed it

Oh it sounds good

she reminds me of stargirl. :D i love stargirl

it was good but u should proofread ur stuff b4 u post it

lmfao x]
this reminds me of me.
and im being completely serious xD

That was funny, great though, she's weird Lol!! Matt sounds nice. Manda

Woot! Finally! And sorry I didn't review earlier, but I was in Glastonbury and I came home late. Then I watched The Blair Witch Project which scared the s* out of me and I didn't dare do anything but curl in my bed and try to sleep :D
This was amazing, especially the parting line! M, who knew little girls knew such things existed?! Haha.
If you want, you can send me your chapters before you update them and I'll edit them for you...Only if you want. Just a suggestion :D

Love,
Ali

great epilogue. its sounds great. manda

Well i know that i'm reviewing on my friends account on her story but i don't care Mrs OCD. You know what i've read and suprisingly enough i love it. i've been around with you too much, it's rubbing off on me! Going to read the first chapter now so i don't get !
I'll be reviewing at mine later on today with you!
HUgz

To be completely honest, I loved the idea of your story. But, I need to be brutal because I just can't stand the way you misspell so many things. It drives me insane (which is ONE word, by the way). You use incorrect words in improper places, and you're vocabulary level is about as large as a fifth grader (considering my younger sister is, in fact, a fifth grader). I honestly have to say that I couldn't finish you story. My apologies at its greatest, but you're improper grammar is getting to my OCD (Obsessive COMPULSIVE Disorder). And the part that really flipped me out was when you talked about my favorite (yes, 'favorite'. I live in the US) saga series, Twilight. When you gave Breaking Dawn's main idea away, it nearly killed me. How could a writer who claims to like Twilight so much do that to other fans? Why would you ever write anything near to what happens in SOMEONE ELSE'S novel in your own story? That is a major spoiler, and kind of rude. It really disappoints me to be saying this, honestly. But, I just with you could understand exactly where I'm coming from. It almost got to the point where I was only reading to find more of your amateur mistakes. Not that I can really talk, considering I am no novelist myself. But, you do claim to have an 'editor', if not two. But, if that's the case, I think you need someone that is actually going to READ and EDIT your chapters. And I apologize again for my extreme criticism, but you really have some grammar issues to deal with. Perhaps it's just my OCD, and I am just an inconsiderate jerk. But, I can say that I am okay with that. Regardless of my efforts to inform you of your constant errors, I advise to keep writing. Your writing can only get better at this point. Good luck in future stories, but I probably won't read them. I hope that this is the first and last rude review you will ever get. If you'd like to yell at me, feel free to say whatever you think. Thanks for your time.

One last thing, I know that I am a year younger than you (Age fifteen), but the people you have chosen for your characters' pictures are ridiculously outrageous. These characters are in HIGH SCHOOL, not in their 30s. Again, thank you.

Sincerely,
The person you probably hate right about now( Aka: Raquel.)

Aw, the sweetest ending ever!:D I loved it!
I remember when we had Ofsted. God, they just STARED at us! I kept spelling things wrong- it was so embarassing! :D
And guess what? My parents want to move, and they're thinking about moving to Oxford or somewhere in Dorset. My Dad suggested Salisbury but we don't know...M...
PLEASE do and Epilogue!

Love,
Ali

Aw! Luv it!Update!

-Ali