You're missing a few commas and quotation marks. I'd be willing to beta for you, if you're interested. You have a cool story, filled with questions.

I like the umlaut in "Zoe!" (although I can't get my comop to reproduce it.)

"Not minding to put on my slippers" is an odd phrasing.

"He’s-he’s dieing!" should be spelled dying

"“What’s wrong with him ma’am?”" should have a comma after "him"

"Her throat was a desert" Confusing. Whose thoat?

The main question here appears to be what this mystery disease is. So far, I'm not sure whether this is science fiction, although I'm sure that'll come clear soon enough.

man the part about the news gave me chills.
i liked the part with travis, and i like the complications. i really want to see it develop into some crazy issue.
good.

i like it, but i think that i liked the first version better b/c you had that fling, but i'm just a sap for romance. Did you chop up pieces from other chapters and make them into this? ha well i still liked it.

Okay, I am officially creeped out. Great start. That's a really scary virus. I wonder: is Zoe immune, perhaps?

I like your writing style and tone. Zoe's character is easy to pick out of the narration. You might want to be a little more careful about proofreading, though. There's some spelling and grammars that stick out and are easy to catch if you only go back and look it over.