So basically, I don't know where I can find Freak-of-Spades' page even though I've seen references to that name several times. Unless it's on the SKoW Yahoo! group or whatnot, I won't be able to see it for a few days.

Anyway, I still like the story.

Unexpected, the kiss, but I liked it - gave the story some flavor, definitely. :) I liked the ending, how it didn't hint either way whether they ever got together or not - judging by the article at the end, I think there's still hope they did, which is nice.

A few grammatical errors, but nothing too heinous. This doesn't say "complete," will there be more chapters? I hope so.

Jules

Your diction is just amazing!

ahahaha

I was all 'Oh that's sad, it's finishing and they still aren't going to be together (I mean that's OK, but it's still sad). And then that newspaper heading is so funny. The italicize *Outing* made me laugh so hard.

Wow. I seriously hope you're planning on continuing(?) this. It's really good.

I liked the shortness of this. I don't know why, though. Maybe because when something is wrapped up shorter like this it often gives a more intense feeling when done right. In some cases it just feels rushed; to me this didn't. It felt paced right and you can see things between the lines that didn't need to be said. That sort of "shallow" look of the characters was actually all that was needed to paint a very vivid and believable picture of them.

I also highly approve of the ending. XD! I didn't expect it, for one, and it has a "POW!" feel that has you snickering a little to yourself without knowing exactly why. Good work, late or not! =D

More character development would have really served this story well. I mean, I like it. It's alright. But you would have to expand it to make readers actually care about the characters. If you expanded it, going into more detail and such, it had the potential to have been a really great story. But even as it is, it was still ok. Thanks for posting!

Awweaweawe. I loved. Vann is pretty much my favorite type of character. The ending was sad. I almost started to feel a little teary-eyed.

Loved the kaleidoscope paragraph and nice job incorporating everything. :D

Great one shot, I especially like the ending. :D