At first it actually seemed as if he knew her. The transition from lover-boy to stalker is really well done. Very creepy story, not gonna lie.

WOW!
This really puts you into the mind of people like this, and it is very well written.
It's kind of disturbing, and very interesting.

Damn.
I was like "...WHAT THE HELL!"
It ended so soon X_X
I want moar.
I like how you write, though, especially the contrast in the almost uber-proper, fanciness and then ending that paragraph with "All the shit girls like". Love it.

Tres bien.
I love the way you made it gradually clear that this isn't a normal relationship- at first, I read it and thought 'Huh? Sappiness? I thought this was horror.' A couple of paragraphs later I was happily thinking, 'Ah, there it is...'
(yawn) And now, I *would* tackle your full-length fic s'ept... I'm tired. Wanna go sleepy-bye... just like the girl in this fic...
o_O
Wait, no, *not* just like the girl in this fic. Stalkers are *not* my friends!
Much Love

Isilthrar

If that weren't so scary it'd be funny! I have to confess, I was trying to guess the end the whole time... But I never saw that coming. Remarkable.

Very nice. At first, it was just like a normal situation, but then it all his you at the end. Great job!

O, creepy. The way you dropped the line "...any pervert off the street could just walk right in" was perfect. It really gave the sense that this man isn't right in the head and is most likely deluded. I really enjoyed this.

I have a terrible feeling that I shouldn't write this. But, you're one sick fuck man. I had a feeling the character in this story would be a sick bastard as well. I just don't see the point in this, what kind of thoughts are you trying to provoke? Trying to see how some people think? Ah well, different strokes for different folks they say. I would just rather you put your amazing abilities to better uses is all.

It’s an absorbing short story that captivates its reader. First led to believe that the speaker and the woman are in fact in love with each other, the story leads us away from this erroneous assumption as the man speaks of what can only be described as stalking her. His further description of how easy it is to break into her house (how does he know?) and then, finally, her terror at his presence and the fact that he drugs her in order to bring her to his house shows that this is not a love affair, but a kidnapping. This change in the reader’s perception keeps us enthralled, waiting to hear what happens next. The ending leaves the reader yearning to know more, making guesses as to what happens next. (I liked it meanie, just leave me hangin’ like that, wandrin’ what’s gonna happen… *pouts, not fair)

Nicely done! It was kind of obvious that he was just stalking her, and I'm not sure if that was the effect you were going for, but it made the story more interesting, so good work!

That creeped me out, but I love the details you use throughout the story. Good job!

I sort of saw the ending coming because of your summary, and I was a tad disappointed that I saw it coming because I think it would have been more enjoyable if I hadn't... if that makes any sense at all. Anyways, I like the last line, and the way the girl is described in the beginning. Pretty good. Keep it up! :)