Please please write more. I love your stories
I'll give you all the inspiration you want
>>YOU'RE AN AMAZING AUTHOR
>>YOU'RE STORIES ARE AMAZING
>>MAYBE YOU SHOULD PUBLISH THEM INTO A BOOK
>>I LOVED TWISTED CLICHéS
>>I LOVE DESTINIES INTERTWINED
>>YOU HAVE AN AMAZING SKILL IN YOU

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I'm sad for you that you have to put this on hold, but I understand what your going through and I can be certain that your rewritten version will be at least three times as good as this one!!
Keep on writing!
Narq.

It took so long for me to begin reading this story, it's really good, I love it. Can't wait to find out what happens next

Aww... yeah I like this~ Frienship is everything, isn't it!

This is a good chapter~~

Best story I have ever read. Wel like the second best. But it was still good.

omg!! pls update.. instead of studying i'm reading your story :D its amazing!

Oh this chapter was just fabulous! I'm going to go see your new story now!

Hm.. I opt for the past. Good chapter though.

I really have no ideas for you. I have no clue what you are trying to get to in the story and my muse has been MIA for a while, at least with anything happy. Sorry.

That's okay for the late update. It's good to have a rest. REmember that you're writing for yourslef, not others.
Good chapter!

Hm... I don't know much about ideas, but I thought you're doing a pretty good job already. Have you thought of the ending of the story? Maybe it could gradually come...?
Narq.

At least it is going somewhere...it's kinda losing interest again. Are you having trouble with ideas for this or is it too many ideas in your head that you cannot seem to get out? Or something else that I failed to ask? Update.

I feel (after skimming through chapter 1) that the whole chapter was just dialogue. Try having more descriptions, and actions, stuff like that, because when people are reading too much dialogue between all these people, it gets to be repetitive, you know? Like, for example, "See ya" and "See ya", or "Alright" and "Alright, okay", etc. Maybe sometimes, someone can 'nod in agreement', or something like that, anything to make it a little more interesting instead of just people talking. Think about it, people don't just stand there and talk for forever; have some motions and things that the readers can use to get some connotations, some interpretations, some excitement. You have a really good, attracting summary for this story, so with less quotations and dialogue, it would be amazing. :)

Haha, I wondered why Elizebeth sounded so familiar~ you used the name in both stories and both nicknames Beth. It does get a little confusing though~ nice chapie~
Narq.