This is beautiful, beautiful language. Really excellent. I don't know if the underlining was by accident or as a dramatic accent, but honestly, it is totally unnecessary and takes away from the words, which are the interesting part.

I really love the paragraph that contains 'I'. The whole fairy-tale feel works really well. The only part of this I had any mild problem with was the "Bad guy/scared guy" bit - a little less poetic than the rest of the piece, though the idea is good.

Faves!