"Another look at Leona, and I knew even if her body could last longer, her mind was at the brink."

My mind kinda lapsed when I read that line so I had to re-read it again. I think you were actually typing "couldn't last much longer".

Nevertheless, a nice chapter, I like how you mentioned key characters from the past series. I always do like techniques like that.

I just realized Anser could possibly be a play on the word Answer under these circumstances lol.

As always you have a remarkable way with describing things in first person perspective. I saw some spelling/grammar errors here and there, but nothing too too serious. I enjoyed the comedic tone you inserted in there lol. Anyways, keep up the writing.

It's nice to see more on Kerrigan and Iris' relationship. I like how they worked together with Giselle to infiltrate and try to find something out. I also like your ties with Midori, who had been minor up until now. This whole story is pulling together nicely.

I feel sorry for Ikki. He must have some kind of guilt on his shoulders. I just hope that Giselle can be of some help and I'm wondering if we'll see Souma in this story as well.

The light was a little random but maybe it's just me.

However, I really did like the love conquer's all theme in this chapter. It was classically shoujo and it definitely had a magical girl feel to it. I really like the emotional parts with Anser, it revealed a little more about his character and gave him some depth. Too bad about his parents though. They may have been very interesting characters.

This was really good and I loved your fight sene and the thing about Midori Ai. I do wonder what it has to do with everything.

I really liked your explanation! I'm all pumped to read more!

Melissa Norvell is a great writer and she's always so kind to people. I admire her for that.

But, on to the story at hand...

I loved the water fight. It goes great with the idea that the human body is composed of mostly water to begin with. I feel a little sorry for everyone's bout of bad luck. This reminds me a little of Sacrifice by Melissa Norvell in terms of the whenever you think things will go right, they take a turn for the worse, but you have a different delivery that makes it unique to your world. At first I thought that this chapter would be a simmer-down chapter with a few cute moments here and there and I was completely taken for a loop.

Gotta love the plot twists!

Interesting chapter. It started off as a normal discussion, then a reunion with a friend that was touching, yet bittersweet and into a battle where Saori was fighting for her life. I'm glad to see that Eiri was alright dispute what had happened. It doesn't seem as though she recovered completely but she is better off then she was originally.

The battle was intense and it was the first time I'd seen Saori get beaten that badly. It seems that Kai Gara was definitely the strongest foe she had come across. I wonder why and how Megami managed to get to her. I also wonder what Saori's condition was caused by and why she just sees black. That's not typical of simply being blind.

What an intense battle scene. I was almost certain that Giselle and Keston both might die at different points in the fight. I thought for sure that Keston might die. I hope that they can help him. I don't really think that Amano is dead. Unless the brick hit her in a way that shoved her nose into her brain...I'm a little suspicious of that...

This was a very exciting chapter and I really liked your mix of emotions here. Great job!

Good explanation chapter. It gives a lot of light on Souma, Giselle and Ikki. It definitely ties in things to lead us to how they are now.

The thing with the sunglasses seemed sort of random. How did they come up with a cure that soon without a proper diagnosis of the situation? Don't things like that take time to invent, or was this one of those elapsed time scenarios? There are a lot of questions regarding that factor that made this chapter a little unbelievable or maybe I'm being too much of a critic. I tend to notice the small things like that.

However, I did like the feeling to this chapter. Very interesting indeed. It seems that Anser is getting a little closer to Saori as well, which is a good thing. I also like that we got to see Anser's parents, though I think a little more description on them would have been a better help to get me a mental image.

Man, Saori had a definite close call there. I'm glad that Keston is alright but now I'm worried about Saori. I hope that her blindness is something that can be cured.