The revision is amazing. I love it. Btw, as far as this Ella chick goes, ignore her. You're entitled to your opinion.

Awesome job!

sorry us twilight fans are so defenceful (?).haha. mabye just me.
by the way i do read real vampire stories i even read some of the books you mentioned.
and yes everybody is entitled to their own opinion. you gave yours and i gave mine.

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i understand that you hate twilight but i love it so i would appreciate it if you didn't go putting it down on your profile. i really hate when people do that sure you have a right to your own opinion but must you say it over and over again. and stephenie meyer is an amazing writer, you know she has an other story that's got nothing to do with twilight maybe you should read it before putting her down.