"Disturb its sleep / And threaten to burst it" - This part is confusing... up until here, the tone of the poem is very motherly and comforting... but this line doesn't seem like either. Haha.

"We are sleeping now / No more generations" - I do like this line, however. It's poignant. :)

-Jesse
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Sweet and sad. If only everyone felt this way.

~fleur

Your capitalization really bothered me. It wasn't consistent. sometimes it was with the punctuation and other times it was just the first word of the line.

The third sentence was also a bit of a runon.

I like the piece though, I love those last two lines, they just worked really well to end the piece. I also liked the word "extraneous" it was a great choice. The subject of the piece was interesting too.

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yes, yes, very good; quietly calling to task the (apparent) absence of divine intervention...

"Ease its heartaches." BEAUTIFUL!

"...as it gives birth to itself over and over." WOW! That line just blew me away!

"No more generations." Where are these lines coming from, my friend? THEY'RE BRILLIANT! :D