this is nice~~but i prefer if the Moon is She,and Day is Him~~lol...

Wow. I think this is the best haiku I have ever read. Beautiful. There are no words to describe this. Absolute perfection!
-Sasha

Whoa. My jaw drooped when I read this. Can’t think straight… It was beautiful truly truly beautiful. It made my chest ache yet I couldn’t stop reading it over and over again. Wonderful.

Wow. Beautiful.

THIS is Haiku imagery.

Wow...It had a great theme, and I general don't like Haikus. (The ** me off because they're so short...dont know why)

Wow! I was beautiful! I've never thought 12 words could make up such a beautiful yet tragic story! I loved it!

this is lovely. very thought provoking!

God, I may've discovered the essence of haiku here; there's the syllable count, the nature aspect, and then so much (oh so much) more. I particularly enjoyed the personification afforded by the diction you've opted for (scans, searching, finds) as well as the capitalization of the players' names. You even managed to work in a bit of heartbreaking tragedy; "he /never/ finds her."

Looking into it a bit much obviously, but I absolutely lurve how Moonlight and Day are at opposite ends of their respective lines, separated by the impossibility of meeting each other. Gah, it's such a simple concept and yet there seems to be something very deep here that I can't quite place. This is definitely a piece I won't be forgetting any time soon; many a bravo.

I like this, and the length works with it.

"He never finds her." Bravo! That line is phenomenal! :D

i like it, like a love story only with natures elements. creative!

Very beautiful. I loved it. I liked the personification and the simplicity. Though, I don't think "scans" fits, it's nice but...there's a jarring effect to it. Try: "Moonlight sweeps the Earth..." So on and so forth. But that's just a suggestion. It's no biggie.
This is a lovely piece. Reminds me of a chapter in my story "Tourniquet" This piece is a meloncholy but hopeful...just like the chap. Loved the piece. Tragic, yet pretty. :)

Adding this to faves!

Speaking of "Tourniquet" do you need another week on that drawing of Ally? I'm just curious on the progress, I just want a heads up on how much longer its going to take you so that I know when to look for it.

Thank you,

- AABAT

I love this, especially the declaritive sentence at the very end. However, I don't know if 'scans' is the right word here.

Happy Writing;
-DV-

A review from the Review Game on its first birthday to thank you for being an active part of the RG community and spreading the review love.

When I read this it sounded so familiar. I was like did I read this and not review it? But then I read your author's note and it made sense... lol. I like this a lot. The capitalization of Moonlight and Day works well to make them people. I also like the whole personification in the last line, it's a great description.