I’m always fascinated with how other writers view writing, I think we’re all different, yet so eerily the same.

I honestly had no problem with your second line until I read you a/n, and now I can’t stop thinking about it: “it weighs me down till I can’t stand.” It not a terribly original idea, but I think it holds up with the rest of the piece. Maybe try for another metaphor besides this one. One that is a little off topic but still works with the original idea anyway; for example you could say something like: “it stings me, like a bee in flight” or something.

I really liked the line: “it steals my life away” because I can really relate to that. It does seem at times that the idea itself has more life then the characters, or the writer. I think that line summed up the whole writing process for me. Keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.

Ahh perfectly described:)
Hmm as for the second line, the only suggestion I can offer is that you cut off everything after "down"...but I do like it the way it is:]
Beautifully done=]
Write on!

maybe you can go "weighs me down till I can't stand" rather than "'it' weighs me down till I can't stand" In poetry we tend to only need the words that are really necessary and that show the full meaning of our feelings so the 'it' may not be needed. In my opinion, the 'it' also ruins the rhythem.
Great poem!
Narq.

Maybe for the second line you could use...
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A Heavy Burden upon my back
It calls to me with what I lack

A Heavy Burden upon my back
Taking away what makes me free

I can totally relate to this poem too! You are a wonderful poet and your way with words doesn't confuse me like other tend to! Excellent!

Too true. :-)

I am not sure if you have changed the second line yet or not, but you might try 'weighing me down...' instead of 'it weighs me down' Or even replacing 'weighs' with 'pressing me' or something equally stronger than just weighs.

That would make it work for me.

(Unless you have already perfected and edited it, in which case... nice line.)

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I think this is an excellent way of explaining how a poem is written. Very nice job.

I like the idea here, it's really different and definitely relateable. I also like the mixed emotions. They are very true.

Honestly, I don't really like the first two lines. I think that metaphor seems odd with all the personification later. I also think it's kind of cliched. Not really sure sure what I would do specifically, but something to make it more unique.

Other than that it's a great piece!

A lovely take on the curse and gift offered by the wondrous and simultaneously nerve-wracking occurence that coming up with an idea can be, particularly prior to penning it. The way this is written lends to a strange, disjointed flow, though; the foundation is definitely there, but I feel offering a bit more attention to syllable count and concise word choice would do wonders for this piece.

A few suggestions, then: nix the semicolon for a comma on line three; replace the two "can't" occurences with "cannot"; murder the little transitional line there — I don't feel it provides anything to the poem and it stands out as being wholly inconsequential and unnecessarily harsh. Mm, and I quite agree that ending with the second-to-last line would finish the piece far more smoothly.

Other than those few tidbits of criticism, though (terribly sorry, just wasn't feeling this particular entry), I quite like the crux of the piece: writing, in the end, is most definitely a pleasurable burden to bear, if any sense at all can be made of that statement. :)

This is good. It is cute and differnet. I would add a but before i nuture it until it's grown.

Perhaps the second line of the first stanza would be less awkward if you removed the 'it' at the beginning? Just a thought.

"It steals my life away." Beautiful line! :)

I love this! Poems about the origin of writing are my favorite. BUT--here comes the 'but'--I believe the last line should be omitted. The second-to-last will provide for a sweet, tangy ending. Otherwise, great job!

-DV-

I decided to read a bunch of your **
but it really ** sucks,
so I'm not going to.

Learn some GRAMMAR! And to read over what you type, because DAMN, how did you miss the missing R in the title of this.

"Bith"
I really don't like the idea of this, either.