This is a story with potential, but I don't think it was as well written as it could have been.

Some typo's, and occasional name mix-ups, but that's nothing too serious, and chapter 12 is a repeat of chapter 11. Judging from chapter 13, the real chapter 12 is missing in action somewhere!

So it needs some editing, and it's also a little too jumpy and childish in places.

All in all, as I said, the plot has some potential, but this is not up to the same standard as some of your other stories.

Spawny

Interesting story so far...

I look forwards to the next update...

Spawny

Well, never knew you've got a new story up here. :) Anyway, I guess this is all about one random guy being transported to a fantasy world, huh? :D Anyway, I'll have to say it sucks to be Owen lol. XD Well, I'm really wondering what kind of fantasy world awaits Owen and whether his memory problem will play a part here. :)