|Reviews for The Move|
| Mascara is evil 12/20/08 . chapter 4
Umm... really Trevor what do they say about black girls? I don't like him. I hope he gets hit with a puck in the face. Kiya is a little snippy, no? Maybe she should consider calming down. Good chapter. I'm happy now. ;)
| IndianPrincess 12/18/08 . chapter 4
I just started reading this story the other day and am really enjoying it looking forward to the next update so please update again real soon because I can't wait to see what happens next.
| Divisionred 12/13/08 . chapter 4
I thought that the update was good. I am glad that she and Austin are at least talking and he is helping her study. She seems to have a ot of responsibilities in taking care of her three brothers. What happened to their mother? What kind of dr is their father? What does Austin's parents do if he has a BMW which sounds like a classic car. Also are he and his sister twins? I know, I need to go back and read the last 3 chapters for the answers. Thanks
| bwilkins 12/9/08 . chapter 4
I liked chap.4, can't wait till chap5 and to see how long before Austin and Kiya hook up!
I like your writing style. :)
| Writing4Eternity 12/8/08 . chapter 4
Good chapter but you should expand more.
| sourgummyworms2007 12/7/08 . chapter 4
okay, i like the basis of ur story, but its lacking. it feels so dry. i'd like to know what the characters are feeling, u should go into a bit more detail. describe the pain she feels that her father isn't around, how she's the responsibal over her brothers. like in the first chapter i would have loved to read her anger over learning that she was moving.
anyway, interesting story. i'd like to read more.
| bwilkins 12/6/08 . chapter 3
I like what I'm reading. So, Kiya is playing the mother role huh? I can't wait for things to heat up for her & Austin. Looking forward to the next update! Soon I hope!
| reesiedoo 11/27/08 . chapter 3
This is really good. I really like the tension between Austin and Kiya. Update soon.
| mystic.fox 11/25/08 . chapter 3
I like the premise of the story and it's good so far, but watch your spelling (specifically of synopsis). Update soon.
| Writing4Eternity 11/23/08 . chapter 3
Oh I like this story
| Kogas Super Nova Girl 11/23/08 . chapter 3
The mechanics of your story need a lot of work. There are many grammatical and spelling errors. I would suggest triple-checking your work before updating, or getting a beta, ok? Hope I helped. Good plot by the way.
| toonmili 11/21/08 . chapter 3
Oh this was good. I was getting used to it then it then it ended. Hurry up and update
| misssweetsweet 11/20/08 . chapter 1
This is a good story, but you *really* need to become best friends with your spellchecker. Some of the mistakes that I saw peppered throughout this first chapter were things you should have caught just re-reading your story again. If your spellchecker isn't the most reliable on the planet, then get a beta reader that is. If you're desperate, I'm more than willing to beta this for you. You should get this beta'd and repost the better version ASAP. Good first try.
| Divisionred 11/20/08 . chapter 3
So why is she so snippy with her dad? She and Austin like each other. Thanks for a great read.
| Divisionred 11/20/08 . chapter 2
I love that the triplets are on a soccer team. Their dad seems to be doing ok with raising for children I assume alone. What happened to their mother? Kia does't seem to like MA to much...I am glad that she found two hair salons with black beauticians and has made some friends. Her and Austin interaction so far has been funny...are you calling me a jackass she said and his response when you figure it out get back to me...wow, LOL.