I've been meaning to read this for some time. So far, I love it! Brilliantly written, easy to read, engrossing, and I love the way Kris thinks about stuff.

Favourite line:

"Never mind the fact that I was skinny as hell; I had to fucking pass out like a eighteenth century girl in a public place for people to realize that I had problems."

Just... golden ;)

Wow. I didn't have too high of hopes coming into this story. But everything is great. The way you write-it captures me, and still hasn't let me go. I loved this first chapter. The dialogue, the descriptions, it chilled me to the point of: J.D. Salinger. Keep up the good work. I'll be following this.

Haha, running away! Didn't see that coming. I think it was cool how you had Kris questioning existence after his little accident. The book club ladies were funny. What I really liked was how you made that book inspiration for Kris' running away instead of pulling a "i dnt liek it her!!@!! Im going 2 lev!" The way you thread stuff together works well. So it's off to the big city! Can't wait to see what occurs next :)

Interesting? O.O

I like your story. I'm glad stuff is happening. It'll be interesting to learn more about Becky, and I love Serendipity. She has a very well suited name. xP

Aw cliff-hanger! POO on U!!1 Haha, joking. I liked the ending of that chapter because it leaves the reader with a thirst for more. Don't dehydrate us, okay? Better write more, or else. Yes, that's a threat. I also love the new character, she's an awesome freak!

What I didn't like was... forget this. Another thing I liked was the fact that Kris is the school freak. So freaky the freaks disown him. It's a bit exaggerated but yes, an anorexic guy would have issues fitting in! Now go write more or I'll get my polearm... :)

I like how Kris goes off on his little "He doesn't deserve you" rant, it gives him a lot of character and it's just funny to read because it makes it so obvious that he isn't gay.

Cripes, I'm not going to simply correct a typo again. That's getting redundant. Okie, another thing I liked was your character Sedgwick, because he's funny. Crack cookies, everything has crack in it, that's great.

Another great chapter! I really like how you show so many aspects of Kris' life. And finally he gets a hair cut! :p I think it's great to show so many aspects of the character's life because it really gives you insight to who they really are and makes you feel like you know them.

What I didn't like? This:

"Oh, okay, I say, and go to the corner to listen to something a little more happy. God knows when Candi gets here, I'm going to need all the pie-in-the-sky optimism I can possibly muster.

The quotation is not finished. It was very distracting.

There's a thing to be said when someone has to hunt for a bad thing to say :)

Wow! I really like your story!

I liked the voices of your characters, they're very interesting but at the same time realistic. I can actually picture them all as real people in the real world. You really understand EACH of your characters, not just the main one :) That's very important. I absolutely loved the personalities/quirks of all characters, especially the main character. you're one of the very few people I've seen that can actually pull off first person present tense!

What I didn't like? Hm... Well, there were some typos that could throw someone off a little or distract them a bit. this one's hilariously distracting:

I smile and walk out the doo

Love your work! Can't wait to read more!

Interesting. How do you pronounce Delia? I always think of it as Delilah like that song, but I have the feeling I'm very wrong. xP

Haha! I love this story! Well not the story, it's ordinary enough, I LOVE your main character! He is SO cool! His little comments or thoughts is what makes this story so extraordinary! Update more often! =D

I really hope you continue working on this story! All of the characters are alive and ready for even more development. Great work so far!

I like the faults you've given Kris and that you've made an unspoken promise to the readers that we will find out more about his illness. Great job!

Keep it up!

Wow! Very impressive! I like how you had some funny parts in there but transitioned well into more serious sections. Very well done! The whole story is very capturing.

♥ Dreaming Chica ♥

WOW. This is really good. I'm really impressed. It sounds like the beginning of a novel I'd pick up at the library or whatever, like one of those Simon Pulse type books, it doesn't have that amateur feel that my, and many other wannabe writers have. You sound amazing already. My only complaint would be for Kris as the main character - he's kinda hard to like. I mean, maybe tone it down a tiny bit? If I met him, I think I'd just think he was kinda annoying. I like that he likes music though, it makes you see that there's another side to him. WOW LONG REVIEW. Anyway, well done!

Bwahahaha. Menstrual fluid. Yes, the joys of Sex Ed. I love the narrator`s wonderfully hilarious train of thought. He`s seems ordinary at first, yet you always find a twist, don`t you? Bam, he`s anorexic. (;

Serendipity is an interesting character, to say the least. She`s all over the place, what with eccentric clothes and original personality, as well.

My only nitpick: [The light from the two windows in my room is streaming into my room] I don`t think you need the second "into my room", just add an "in". Other than that, there were no problems with grammar and spelling. Great start.

Still can`t believe you wrote this all in one day. Keep on going at it, Dusty. Looking great!

-Gob