I like this. It's a good rewrite of an already interesting story.

:) CD

Cool story. Is there more?

It's kind of confusing. With all the different point of views and stuff. Maybe you should have a couple main characters and go with that. But it seems interesting enough! Good work!

Nice: I like it a lot!
Keep up the good work!

really good but there are alot of sides to the story. it is pretty easy to get lost. so just a question are all the chapters going to be like this or is it going to be split up between jake, bradley etc.?