All your capitalization was by teh first line except "Lifeless Hanging" and "He shrugs She nods it is understood." I would change those so that they fit with the rest of the piece.

I like the middle and the left thing. It creates an interesting aspect to the piece and it works well to separate those parts. I also think your descriptions are really great, especially "That picturesque grin"... that was a great image.

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