This is a very odd story. It's quite good, just in a very different style, which is actually quite refreshing.

I like it!

I have no freaking clue why no one has reviewed this yet, but I really liked it! :)

There were a few typos, like 'brake' instead of 'break', but they didn't take away enough from the story to keep it from being enjoyable. It would be super if you continued this story.