lool actually thats really good. short simple, and quite relaxing.

i was a bit skeptical at the beginning and "But the laundry," didn't really fit properly for me but the ending was brilliant! keep writing, that was quite good

I like it. Odd, but I often find myself narrating my own life, too, very dramatically so. Never out loud, though, they might have me committed if I do that. Great writing, what grade did Creative Writing give you for this?

You should definitely update with more scenes, it would be a very interesting read.

Oh my gods I wish clocks got set back for me in the morning!
-Jenn

I think that it's very neat and well written, on the whole. I can't really see any problems.

I wanna be able to set time back.

Manga5