I liked this.
It was really short, but you surprisingly got enough information in there to make it work.
The beginning was a good hook and it really grabbed my attention.
It's hard to really critique or anything thus far considering there isn't much, but I will be sure to continue reading this.
Update soon.

--Jessie my l o v e

p.s. p a y it forward.

Coming here from The Roadhouse Forum, and asking people to pay the review love forward!

I like this story - it's short, obviously, and certainly not complete. That means there isn't much I can comment on, but I'll give it a go!

The setting you create is one akin to something like Underworld, or the BBC TV series "Ultraviolet", with dedicated accademies for fighting supernatural beings. You manage to create this imagery with very few words, and that is to your credit. I think that the descriptions in here are good - I particularly like the way the narrator describes his hair, in the middle of combat! It's a cool trick which not only shows us what he looks like (blond) but also tells us that she likes him (I presume the narrator is a she) and is looking at him "in that way", and also that he is beginning to lighten up (letting his hair grow out). This is a great use of very few words!

I like this story, it is a good beginning.

I hope you continue with this! I love prologuesthat leave the reader wanting more, otherwise what's the point of having a prologue at all? Please continue!

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-Stardust.

its ok for a Prologue because its like really good when can you write more to it
because its good ... I'm looking forward to reading more ...