|Reviews for Crumble|
| theycallmetalljake 6/29/11 . chapter 1
i love it, its so urg, school, reminds me of life... yeah, i just really like it
| Serendipitist Swan 9/11/10 . chapter 1
Usually I don't like bolding because it's distracting but I think it really worked for you. It really made the chosen sentences stnd out and added to the angsty feeling of the story.
| lijuan 6/4/10 . chapter 1
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| GirlWithTheBrokenSmile 1/16/09 . chapter 1
I really like how you the bold thingie. It gave the whole poem more emotion and force (for lack of a better word).
The poem itself is amazing, too. Very relate able and beautifully written.
Keep at it:)
| simpleplan13 11/23/08 . chapter 1
I think the formatting was a bit much. It just didn't really seem necessary. I did like the line "Ha" It was a nice touch. I do think you need a period after it though.
The title is interesting. It doesn't come directly from the piece, but it fits with it well.
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| milkshake1987 11/23/08 . chapter 1
very well writen and describes what the majority of what people feel abot their oun life.
| Isca 11/14/08 . chapter 1
"I'm never good enough." That line is so sad!
"Stab my heart like daggers." Great imagery! Full of angst!
| MagicWords 11/14/08 . chapter 1
Amazing. It's so hard, when we try so hard, and what we want doesn't work out. I feel for you in this.
| Jessica Shaw 11/14/08 . chapter 1
Okay, who are you talking about and who is making you think this? If it's Ms. Witcher and Ms. Burr, we already said that they were wrong. Your efforts are good enough and always will be good enough. Anyone who says otherwise is retarded!