I love that poem! *adds to favorites*
I think the last 3 stanza's were really great, but here's a suggestion.

In the 5th stanza (last line)instead of saying die you could say collaspe, but that's just my opinion bcuz I think that when you're saying "die" it's a bit melodramatic.

And then in the 6th stanza (last line again) I think that if you repeated "cry" instead of "die" it would tie the poem together a bit more, but using "die" does make it a little more intense. Only suggestions though. Lovely work.
xkatt

hey. i accually really like the 4th stanza.
"I crack as you rapidly drift."
i know only to well just how awfull that feels.it is almost worst to slowly lose those you love then have them quickly stolen away.
the 6th stanza, i do agree needs a little work, but ill mess around with it and pm u any suggestions.
good job!:)
Luv,
Glory