Very nice. touching too. Keep writing

Have a Merry Christmas!

Stormpaw

"but maybe in, say, another life"... I didn't like the word say there. I think the tone was to slang to match with the rest of the piece

'more evanescing dream"... love that word, it's so different. I don't think I've ever seen it in a poem before.

I like the piece. The repetition of maybe works well. I also like the ending, so bittersweet. The rest is nice too, some great descriptions.

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hey, nice work again. my favorite line-'we'll pour out empty poetry into a wounded horizon' it striked me as so excruciatingly painful. like the bitter pain of truth.
Keep writing.
just keep writing.

Wow. This was really beautiful. And oh how I can relate. Very nice work.