I really liked this poem you did. I like the repetition in it. You described it so well. I like the beginning par the most. I like the infection part too. Your poem has a nice flow to it. Please read and review my stuff. I want to be a good writer some day.

Hey, I love this! I like how the half rhymes, rhythm and repetition make the poem flow perfectly. Great description! Nice piece =]

PS I see why you commented on the New Zealand thing now! I will be flying over to your country in approx 2 months! SO EXCITED!