Thank you for the review.

The assonance that occurs through this poem is wonderful. It helps the ideas and the sounds just roll right off the tongue. I really enjoyed reading it. [:

"The sound is like a ripe round peach being cut in half." A sensuous, happy, friendly simile :)

"The clash of glass like a minuscule car crash. A man’s eyes shining bright and brown like brass. A champagne glass." The wording and meter here is phenomenal! You should write more poetry with lines like this--it really captivates the reader.

Keep up the great work!
-Isca