I liked the way you described her at the beginning. The first [dry lips] is something that one wouldn't necessarily notice about a person at first. I liked the the subtle-ness of that. It added to the piece somehow. The only thing I would say is that I think there should be a comma between "dripping arms" and "bleeding sin". It would even out the flow a bit better. Other than that, nicely done.

-Dee, from the Review Marathon.

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I loved it, especially the second line.

This is a lovely little snippet. Really great imagery packed into a short poem. Well done.

Maybe you could check out my new poem "star swallower"?

This just made a really nice vision in my head,

and i can't quite put words to it ..

you're a talented writer.