"It was raining, and I might have hallucinated facets of myself refracted in the bright prisms of your eyes." Glorious imagery! Very well-written!

The second paragraph was breathtaking. Overall I really liked it. And I digged the Spider and the Fly reference. That's one of my favorite books. Not only is the story awesome, but the art is fantastic.

Going in my favorites,
Laura

this sentence is wildly cool:

'When white, lace veined wings began to fight their way through the skin of your back, I knew it was not the weather.'

so it's a class assignment. build up something around this sentence and discard the rest.

imo.