Wow, that was beautiful. Really, really beautiful.

I liked that last stanza the most. amazing.

-the concept of breathing

what a very wide vocab you have...a lot bigger than mine. They way you embedded big words into your writing worked very well, so write more good stuff!

Woah, again. Have you ever thought of getting published? Have you been published?

Because this is amazing. You should look into it. Soon.

Beautiful, lush language. Very nice.