|Reviews for Thrum|
| Naked Geese Reunion 11/28/08 . chapter 1
Hm... not entirely sure how much I should say about this piece for fear of being completely off. I absolutely love the first stanza, each pair of lines just faintly rhyming (or perhaps that's just me); it also sets a nice tempo for the remainder of the poem.
The second section seems to be a continuation of the first, only now it's displayed far more clearly that the narrator has pressing matters on their mind. Loved the onomatopoeia offered by the fourth line here, as well. I'm going to assume that the piece is written to the scene of lovers being forced apart (temporarily, of course) by the pressures of schoolwork. Assuming this is what you were going for, this entry delivers beautifully.