I know it's wrong and countrary to all tone and plotline thus far--but I can't help wanting Bela to have a happy sappy romantic story ending. Usually, that kind of thing annoys me. Congrats for creating a character so realisticly vulnerable and tough and gritty that it makes me want a sappy ending. You horrible, wonderful, human being. Eventually I will get around to writing reviews that more clearly express my fondness for your writing. Anyway, thanks for the story. ~anon

I started reading as more of a joke than anything else, thinking that the title 'bela the nymphomaniac vampire slayer' couldn't possilbly be for real... and I love it. I think that bela's internal dialogue, while occasionally annoying, is hilarious!
I do think that the internal dialogue should be cut down, though. when you do descriptions, you're good at them, but bela spends too much time talking to herself or even just thinking to spend much time on the setting.
All in all, it's a good story! can't wait for the next chappie! :)
Luffs Lea xx

Amazing...Sensational!! -The Bec times. lol.

That was really good, I mean I can't wait for the next chapter. After all I am a fan of the big explosion, something about it is just so thrilling lol.

Brilliant chapter! I absolutely loved it. Have to run to the gym now, I'm late as it is - just had to read this. :D Keep up the good work!

woah great!! Loved how Bela kicked Taylan's arse! Everyone loves a good explosion!

yeah, I'm that loser who always forgets to review, but it's really sort of a complement because your story is really that distracting, eventually I'll get around to a more complex opinion but for now... you rock, I'm love the main character because she actually has a character and the voice is compelling and kick-ass, please just keep being awesome

I am so so glad I stumbled upon your story. It's amazing. I think Bela has one of the strongest character voices I've seen. I love how she tends to ramble on, it's always entertaining.

Can't wait for the next chapter. :)

Well you're officially my favorite author on here...I honestly don't think I've ever seen a better use of sarcasm and anger from another story. That was brilliant to say the least, your writing is exceptional and somehow you managed to have great characters with it. Most people only accomplish one or the other. There's not a whole lot else to say, except holy awesome story batman!

Looking forward to the next chapter, gotta hate cliffhangers.

The long inner dialogue was maybe a bit long. Otherwise, a good chapter. The shit DID hit the fan. Tao not dead? That's almost as bad as him *being* dead. Where is he then? And what *is* the deal with Taylan?

Can't wait to read more. I love this story.

sh...
do u hear that?
thats the sound of shit hitting the fan.

YAY!
gotta love an unexplicable cliff-hanger

Thatw as so cool. Wow, I loved the conversation that she had with herself. that was hilarious.

whoa!! where did that come from haha!

Oh I wonder what her reaction to that will be. Can't wait for another chapter! :D

Ah, our dear Bella. Though this is clearly a plot device so Taylan can show off his manly side, it is an interesting development.

I hope it's not a precursor to the end of Bella's career. She's too awesome for that.

Hey there!

Huh. I don't really know how to go about saying this...but BtNVS has really (very quickly) become one of my absolute favorite FP stories of all time (even though half of them are, sadly, trash anyway :[). The plot is unique and PLAUSIBLE for a vampire story (damn you, Stephenie Meyer and your stupid sparkling vampires!), and Bela's narrative style is all-out fucking AWESOME and gives the story a massive dose of amazing.

So, obviously I really really adore Bela, because she's honestly one of the more interesting characters I've ever read about (God, I hate those stupid, cliche, self-deprecating heroines, who whine and whine about how everyone else just sucks and how men are all masochistic assholes, but who also happen to be eerily perfect and beautiful and long-legged and always get the guy - who they ironically hate before they discover all of his positive attributes and manage to seduce him and turn him into a cuddly pile of goo. Okay, I'll stop now before this turns into an all-out rant, complete with nice run-on sentences). Ignoring that parenthetical little diatribe there, I love how she doesn't let anyone push her around. I mean, I've read plenty of stories where the guys are all super de duper controlling and the girls are all like, "lah dee da, I'll just be submissive and let him mouth-rape me if he wants to". Don't get me wrong...submissive protagonists can be a good thing (if the story is well-written), but sometimes it gets extremely boring. I, myself, am not a big fan of submissive heroines and - OH POO, this has just turned into another massive ramble. Ahem.

Okay, before I get too knee-deep in my own spewed philosophies/bullshit, I'd like to move back to the story. Your story. I'll stop with the whole "I HATE CLICHES" BS (because it's so not true. I actually LOVE cliches, but only in moderation) because frankly, I'm getting annoyed at myself too (oh by the way, never go through my favorites, although I dunno why you would, because - gosh, I never even go through my favorites. They make me cringe). I'll stop beating around the bush and say that I've read a lot of stories, and yours is probably my favorite of all. Or at least in the top three. :3 Yay!

So it's taken me nearly four hundred words to get this far. Phew. But yeah, Tristan seems sexy as hell, so would you please but even MORE of him into the story, if possible? He's probably my second favorite character after Bela, although Coutt comes in at a close third (mostly because he's so amusing). And is that jealousy I sense when he warned Taylan off Bela? Anyway, Rutley seems kind of annoying (although he is amusing...one of my favorite scenes was the mind-reading one in Chapter 9), and thus Taylan carries over as annoying. Meh. It does seem like you're setting him up to be a potential boy toy/whatever for Bela, and if that's the case and Tristan doesn't get enough air time, I demand that you write a separate story, a "spin-off" if you will, concentrating solely on Tristan. :D

In any case, since a "well rounded critique is often the most rewarding gift a reader can give" (quoting from that little blurb Fictionpress left down below), I s'pose I'll dish out the constructive criticism. Not that I have any. As I was rifling through my favorites, intent on deleting half of them (but then I got bored and decided I'd do it later...much later), I noticed that the summary to BtNVS contained a "Rated for coarselang sexualref" at the end. While a warning is indeed necessary, I just thought it wasn't necessary to include it in the summary. Just a blurb at the top of chapter one would suffice. I know this isn't really very constructive, and it certainly isn't criticism and I don't know why anyone else would care...but things like that always bothered me. Kinda. I dunno why. It just seems that half of the stories not worth reading on FP seem to contain summaries half-filled with tags or things that aren't quite relevant to the story. Oh, like this one! "Wen Bela mets a nu guy, c falz in luv. But den he kils himslef. how wil c cope. I rote a fic not dat long ago clled My Imortal but every1 hatd it. diz 1 ull al lik. dont flame it!11" Yes, that is a LEGIT summary in the Romance section - a story called "That's What You Get" by "Xbloodyrists6X". Needless to say, I'm horrified. I hope it was written as a joke. But then I clicked on the link and started laughing. It made my day. ANYWAY, oops. I went off on another one of my tangents.. I know I haven't proved my point, and now I don't even know why I was trying to. Sigh.

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Anyhoo, I'd write more, but I'm supposed to be doing practice for the SAT, an idiotic test some sadist from the "College Board" (pfft) decided to create. If you're Australian like I assume, you probably didn't have to take it. Lucky you.

By the way, please keep including interesting vocab words that a dull high schooler like me has never seen before ("fulcrum", "fracas"? Holy hell). That way I can tell my mother that I'm "studying", as opposed to what I am/was actually doing, which is/was reading your highly entertaining story. c:

Okay, I'll shuddup now. That was indeed a demented review. But at least it was long, huh? I even checked it on word count - nearly 10 words. I'm proud of myself, even though the review itself was sadly, utter and complete rambly bullshit.


- Naomi
aka "little purple dinosaur"


P.S. I'm in a banner-making mood! If you want to appease me and give me a general description of the characters' appearances, I'd love to make you a banner! xD