| Reviews for Emotions |
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simpleplan13 11/30/08 . chapter 1You change tenses quite a bit here. I would work on that. Otherwise it's an interesting piece. Very relateable and understandable, but the descriptions are different, which is nice. I honestly, don't really like that last stanza. I would leave it just as the first part (less repetitive), but maybe that's just me. |
Seven Rose 11/23/08 . chapter 1Interesting. There were some parts I liked, "It has come to my heart, To the very deep core: Knocking at my door. What should I do?" was very nice. I was very confused about the dragon though. At first it's inside, then it is knocking at your door to go in? |